1.
losing the real man
is never as upsetting
as losing the dream
2.
So much pain in the
world
But I feel no passion
Save for the personal
Which is out of fashion
3.
alone together
is what many of us
choose
from desperation
these are well done. interesting structure too. quatrain on senryu sandwich.
ReplyDeletea few thoughts:
desperation is itself a choice. we can choose to get over it.
if personal passion is truly out of fashion, there must be a good reason.
if u really lost the dream, u wouldn't be upset.